My Galactic Ultimate Dream Bedroom
"Hello my name is Robert and I am warning you , you are about to be reading a boys dream bedroom".
As you step into my room bright colours fire into your face. My bed is a king sized bed with a blanket that has a fire patterns on the covers with paintball splats as well. The pillow has the same patterns as well.
Nearby there is a mirror hanging on the wall. On the carpet their is a mat that is a mini race track.
Around the corner you can see a t.v. Underneath the t.v there is a play station 4 and 3, and an Xbox 360 and Xbox 1. In fact their is a cabinet full of d.v.d.s and video games . Next to the cabinet there is a computer and 2 ls.
You can smell the caramel popcorn and sugar popcorn. My room feels like technical !! Laptops,3 phones, 2 I pads and 1 tablet.
In my galactic paintball room you would hear paint ball guns firing and splattering on the wall or on the HEAVENS! targeting.
by Robert
Well done Robert with your Dream Room description. I like the way you have included descriptive words in your compound sentences.
ReplyDeleteNSL- to expand your paragraph ideas and include more detail. I would like you to pay special attention to your punctuation too.